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Wednesday, June 8, 2016

Slow writing.

Do you think all fruit should be eaten during break time only?
I think fruit should be eaten in break.
Most green,red and orange fruit is normally full of juice.
Some people say fruit is full of vitamins.  
But some fruit is full of sugar.
When people eat oranges it usually drips down there throat.
I was walking to my class and I saw too much fruit not eaten.
Fruit is healthy for you.
Often fruit is hard to came by.
This is why I think all fruit should be eaten at class time.

9 comments:

  1. Good job, something that would make it better is maybe make it a but smaller.

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  2. Maybe instead of making Slow writing you could tell us why you did this work, what were you learing? But good Job I like how you set it up :)

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  3. I all ready have it.

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  4. i think your work is awesome dude just mabey add imgis

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    1. Next time you post put a capital I.

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  5. This is a great piece of writing. I am glad that you have followed the criteria. I can see that you are fixing your work based on the comments you are getting! That is such a great way to work on your learning! Well done.

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  6. i like how you put describing words

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  7. HI Tobey im with you I agree to only eat fruit in class time.

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